Its been too long...

I generally don't write poems, but today after reading one on a friend's blog I felt terribly inspired. Hence, I wrote this one:


Its been too long,
That I forgot your face,
The one which was with me in every race.

Its been too long,
That I forgot the weather,
The one in which we sang together.

Its been too long,
That I forgot your ways,
The one which used to brighten up my days.

Its been too long,
That people say I should forget you,
The one who filled my life with myriad hues.


Well, as this is my first (or second, if you count the poem I scribbled on a blank page during my English lecture in sheer boredom). It would be awesome if you, after reading these verses, get into a critic-mode and point out all the flaws. Thank You. 

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  1. The sense of nostalgia is there.. and the rhyme of course..

    Though the lines maybe random, there would be a thought behind it.. If I look at it straightforwardly, I think can be about friendship, which one loses and gains and forgets too soon easily at times.

    If I look at it a little more deeper, perhaps it is more, maybe a lover lost to the jaws of death.. one who can't be easily forgotten and one who would fill such memories and make that "its been too long" seem right..

    You've left your reader with something to think about anyways :)

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    1. Yeah, that is the motive. There goes a say "To each one its own". :)

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